Story Outsiders 4

Discussion in 'Fan Stories' started by Polygone, Jun 28, 2012.

  1. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    Desperately need artists to draw some of the scenes for this, PM me if you're interested. ^^;
    ~~~~~
    My name is Sabusha, and I am from a place called Transformice. One day a darkness unlike any other caused me and a group of three others to flee. We ran through a forest and just kept moving, stopping only for food and sleep. We eventually found our way into a section of forest where the plants themselves were lighting our way. We kept moving. We ended up in a huge wasteland full of bandits and large sand monsters. Mostly worms and lizards. It's amazing how hot and bright it could be when there is no sun. Now we are at a camp on the Southern border of a place called Tyranth, and the mice here are about ready to head into battle against some monsters. If we want to stick around, we're going too. Better than wandering the wastes.
    ~~~~~
    Also as a side note: I'll be trying to reformat my story(don't have much of that to do), and putting them in text files so you can read them without all the other posts in the way. I think I already did 1 and 1/2 long time ago, started on the 2nd but didn't finish. Might later. Making sure to do 4 as I post lol. So here:

    Attached Files:

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  2. LOLOL

    Zahile Mouse Goddess

    not bad.
  3. Wishful

    Confusedone Mouse Goddess

    Ima ganna read Outsiders again to understand this...
    E//
    Okay now i understand whats going on
  4. Breezy

    Icanhasdonut Master of Cheese

    Yay more story to lurk on
  5. Stressed

    Cheygirl Prodigy Mouse

    Yay! its out! OUO
  6. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    More story probably every week/twice a week. Maybe more if I feel like it. Short bit now:
    ~~~~~
    They gave us wood and metal sticks and taught us how to shoow and reload them. Wierd sort. Maybe they think it's unfair to use our magik. Oh well, time to go kick some butt.
  7. Wishful

    Confusedone Mouse Goddess

    "They"?

    Well hopefully you'll post more then that:mtongue:
  8. Procrastinating

    Treeclan Master of Cheese

    Outsiders four?? I can't wait to see what this one is about :]
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  9. Breezy

    Icanhasdonut Master of Cheese

    I want to see what the dreamer is about :C
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  10. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    "There they are. Fire when I give the order. Three. Two. One. Now!"
    Our leader signaled the start, and we open fired on our unsuspecting
    adversary. Odd creatures with three legs and acid tongues were everywhere
    in seconds. I guess we surprised them. These tools are loud. Deafening
    even. So I threw mine down and shot a cannon.
    ~~~~~
    Btw...The 'tools' are guns. Sabu dunno what they are because she's all magik x3
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  11. Wishful

    Confusedone Mouse Goddess

  12. Stressed

    Cheygirl Prodigy Mouse

    highlight it
  13. Wishful

    Confusedone Mouse Goddess

    whoops didn't try that ^^
  14. Angelic

    Ravinmad Sage Mouse

    I liked the part that didn't happen yet but is going to happen that involves the thing you wanted art for. xD
    The last bit. ;P
  15. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    SHUSH ABOUT THE PART WITH THE THING OKAY! You're gonna spoil it for everyone. >>
    ~~~~~
    What looked like a mouse with four spiked tails coming out of it's back caught it. The thing stared at me with a confused look for a few seconds before our leader called for a retreat. By now these things were swarming over the hill. Maybe they were more ready than we thought. Oddly enough, they didn't follow us all the way back. They stopped at the border line.
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  16. Pokemaster

    Nekokairi Adorable Chamane | Wolf EN Helper

    Posting upon request.
  17. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    "What the hell was that, soldier?"
    "What do you mean?" -me
    "That thing you shot. THat wasn't any ordinary bullet."
    "I'm sorry sir, but I'm afraid I still don't understand."
    "What are you, stupid? That black orb you fired. Where did you get something like that?"
    "You mean the cannon?"
    "A cannon? Now, where would you get such a powerful weapon?"
    "I dont..."
    "Don't waht? You don't remember where you got it? Then how the heck are you smart enough to even use a weapon like that?"
    "I just...don't understand what you mean sir. I didn't get it from anywhere..."
    "Then how did you have it to fire? Did it just appear out of thin air? Huh? Did you just happen to find it laying on the ground? Spit it out soldier!"
    "I just made it, okay!"
    "What? You made a cannon?"
    "Yeah, so what? Why are you giving me such a hard time about it, it's not like it's that hard!"
    "Not like...Okay, so you magically produced a canon and shot it out. That what you're saying?"
    "Yes sir."
    "Tora, get in here."
    Yes, sir?" -Tora
    "See to it this soldier makes it to intensive care, she's lost her mind."
    I ran.
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  18. Loved

    Pompomball ex cfm hedgie admin ♥

    omg hi qt story ♥

    I should read the rest of the story, and then maybe do some art for it :3
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  19. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    "Stop her! Someone grab her!" -Leader Tai
    I kept running, and Cocoa, Super, and Light were right behind me. They were acting like they actually wanted to catch me. Untill we were far enough away. Then we all got together and I told them what happened.
    ~~~~~
    Being outcasts from the other mice, and our home being destroyed leaves one path left. Joining the monsters.
    ~~~~~
    Well this went well. We're not dead. We showed up at an enemy camp unarmed, and they tied us up and now we're all in a big cage. This could've gone worse.
    Scene 1.jpg
    Image credit to: Zahile
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  20. Wishful

    Confusedone Mouse Goddess

    ???

    lol yeah it is a bit short

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