[Story] Outsiders 2

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  1. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    This is the sequel to my story Outsiders. If you recall, I am now in reality and I'm strapped to a metal bed in the dark. If you don't, well now you know where I left off.
    ~~~~~
    Outsiders 1
    http://cheese.formice.com/forum/index.php?threads/story-outsiders.16519/
    Cocoa's "Behind the scenes."
    http://cheese.formice.com/forum/index.php?threads/story-outsiders-1-and-1-2.16922/
    ~~~~~
    "Arecio, you there?" -me
    "Poly? Is that you?" -Arecio
    "Yeah."
    "Oh, thank god. I thought you were going back into that coma. You've been out for three days."
    "Yeah, well I won't be going back any time soon. And I'm sorry I didn't believe you before."
    "Really? Or are you just saying that?"
    "No, really! I believe you now. Just tell me what happened, and maybe I'll remember some of it."
    "I wouldn't know where to start."
    "How about the beginning? That's usually a good place to start."
    "Okay, I'll start when we met, but I'll just skip the unimportant parts."
    "Sounds good to me, but can you at least let me sit up and listen? It's not exactly a comfortable bed."
    "You promise not to run?"
    "Promise."
    "Fine, I'll open the locks."

    She did exactly that, and I got comfortable while she told me her version of how we met.
    ~~~~~
    Next part is long, so I'll post it when someone else posts.
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  2. Lemunaed

    Masterderp Slayer of Anvil God

    whoa arecio is kind in the story lol
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  3. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    Lol, she's supposed to be nice, just badly frustrated with me. :3
    ~~~~~
    "We met in some random public room. Everyone was doing thier jobs getting the cheese to the hole, and the shaman was always helping out. Well, untill that one guy decided to do some target practice. He started firing at us, and I almost went over the edge. For some random reason you decided to help me up, and we ended up being the only two to make it to the cheese and back."
    "So I saved you?"
    "Yeah, but you realize I would've come back next round, right? Or did you forget that too?"
    "No, I remember. Continue on."
    "After you saved me we became friends, and we'd constantly work together to solve problems. You even taught me how to use cannons to launch myself high into thae air."
    "I didn't know we could do that."
    "I'll show you sometime. Anyways, we were good friends and we helped each other a lot. One day you just disappeared, and I had no idea where you went. A few days later you showed up at my house with some girl tied to you. You wouldn't tell me why."
    "Was that girl named Ravin, by any chance?"
    "Yeah, that's it. Odd chick, but you were still my friend and I didn't ask too many questions. Well one day the police showed up, and arrested me for harboring a fugitive, you two escaped out the back."
    ~~~~~
    I'm a fugitive? Aww man.
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  4. Procrastinating

    Treeclan Master of Cheese

    o: I guess you are.

    Great sequel so far :D
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  5. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    lol ty. I like your story that you've done so far, too. Such creative stories on CFM.
    ~~~~~
    "I'm sorry. I wish I could say it was Ravin's idea, but I don't remember."
    "Well, I ended up in a cell with a bed and a hole. Luckily I was alone. A few days of eating stal cheese, and I was still not mad at you. I wish you had told me, but I don't blam you. I mean, you don't go around telling people you're a criminal."
    "Again, I'm very sorry about that."
    "As I said, I don't blame you. Anyways, one day you and Ravin passed by my cell, and you really did look sorry. You even said so, and I told you I believed you before Ravin went mad and attacked the gaurd. In the confusion you hit your head really hard, and Ravin ran off in the direction you came in."
    "So that's how I got knocked out for so long."
    "Yeah, and the amnesia thing. I was yelling at youto wake up for a few minutes before the medics arrived to take you to the hospital. Shortly after I was released for good behavior, but I had to be the person to take care of you, sinci I knew you best."
    "And here you are."
    "Yep. This is an experimental thing to get you to wake up and remember everything. But, I guess it didn't work."
    "Nope, but my dream helped me remember some of it, and now I'm all better..."
    "That sucks."
    "Why?"
    "Because now you have to go back to jail."
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  6. Lemunaed

    Masterderp Slayer of Anvil God

    MOARRRRR STORIESSS
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  7. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    :D
    ~~~~~
    "Seriously?"
    The lights turrned on, and all the walls were lined with mechanical critters. Several uniformed mice came out of a door and handcuffed my hands behind my back. Then they gave me the whole 'Anything you say' bit and shoved me out of the room and through several hallways. Eventually I ended up in a cop car and we were driving to prison. Have to give them credit, though. It's hard to make a car that passengers can't jump out of unless it's unlocked. Guess I'm going back to prison.

    "Hey, officer." -me
    "What do you want?" -officer
    "What's your name?"
    "You asked me that last time."
    "Well I forgot, so what is it?"
    "GzGregory. The driver is Ugomann. Now shut up the rest of the way, I really don't want to have this conversation again."
    "Yes, sir."

    We drove on in silence while I thought that one over.
    ~~~~~
    Carp. At least it's not the end of the world...
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  8. Breezy

    Icanhasdonut Master of Cheese

    can i be in this?
  9. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    You are in it. A few parts away, though. :3
    (You mainly appear as a background character, though)
    ~~~~~~
    Gz forced me out of the car and into the big wooden building. We passed through doors and past cells and at the back he locked me in a cell.
    "We've kept this one empty, just for you." -Gz
    "Aww...you shouldn't have." -me
    "Just shut up and get in."
    "Okay, but I have one question."
    "What?"
    "What did I do?"
    "You don't remember?"
    "Nope."
    "You're charged with one of the worst crimes a mouse can commit."
    "And that is..."
    "You are under arrest for stealing the cheese."
    "That's it? I stole some cheese? What makes that such a bad crime?"
    "You idiot. You stole from the rulers of the land! Of course it's a crime, and you'll be locked away a lond time unless you either tell us where you hid it, or you die."
    "But, I don't remember anything."
    "Guess you'll be locked up then. Now get in your cage, rat!"

    He pushed me in and locked the cell. Then he left the way he came in. I preferred him as a war veteran. I wonder if I ever met any of those other guys. Oh well, I'm gonna take a nap on the floor. They could at least give me a bed.
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  10. Breezy

    Icanhasdonut Master of Cheese

  11. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    I awoke to an angry Gz waiting with a plate of cheese. I could smell it even from where I was laying. I took the cheese and ate it, once you're past the smell it really isn't that bad. Gz left, I guess he's left in charge of watching me. My day was spent reading graphiti on the wall and pacing my cell thinking about whatever it is I know about me. This went on for a week before I was allowed a visitor, and of course the only person I remember who isn't also locked up was Arecio.
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  12. Musical

    Gzgregory FR Minimod

    Lmao, I'm the pissed off officer :p

    Continue
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  13. Balanced

    Blablablapie Sage Mouse

    When will I be in it xD
  14. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    lawl, pie is in it in like 2 or 3 parts.
    ~~~~~
    "You have ten minutes." -Gz
    "Hi Poly." - Arecio
    "Hi. What's up?" -me
    "Not much. The people here are convinced that you're faking amnesia to keep your secret."
    "Well, I'm not."
    "I know. I'm doing my best to help, but they really don't want to give you a break."
    "I can tell. Did I ever tell you why I was here in the first place?"
    "No, but the guards did. They also told me you had a partner, but they don't know who."
    "Really? I never thought about that."
    "Time up." -Gz
    "It's only been five minutes."
    "Either she leaves or she goes in there with you, her choice."
    "Bye Poly. We'll talk some other time." -Arecio
    "Yeah, bye."
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  15. Procrastinating

    Treeclan Master of Cheese

    Nice, just got caught up. :D
    I wonder how I'm gunna come in xD
  16. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    I'm wondering the same thing. :3
    ~~~~~
    A partner? I had a partner? If I remember who I could probably ask to see them, and maybe I'll figure out a way out of here. Oh well, I'll think about it in the morning.
    ~~~~~
    Internal monologue ftw.
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  17. Procrastinating

    Treeclan Master of Cheese

    Lmfao.
    Portal Reference
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  18. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    :3
    ~~~~~
    First dream I've had since coming here. It was about two mice going into a vault and coming back out without a single thing extra. But after they shut the door and left an alarm went off and some guards showed up. They yelled the vault was empty. That scene just replayed over and over, each time was slightly different. One time the mice were all nude, the next the guards were in uniform, and the mice that went in were taking different routes each time. Sometimes leaving the way they came, and sometimes they went the other way. It was very confusing. But it probably means that I'm guilty. At least it wasn't false imprisonment, that would suck worse.
    ~~~~~
    There is definately a moral in this story. Somewhere. I dunno, maybe the moral is to not go to prison. Yeah, good enough. No better, the moral is to dot your T's and cross your I's. Yeah, that's it. So never forget it.
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  19. Procrastinating

    Treeclan Master of Cheese

    are you procrastinating again?
    I am. Shhhhh! U don't know that ^^
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  20. Creeping

    Polygone Slayer of Anvil God

    LOL most often I have to ask for people to post so I can continue, so I steal slots for later whenever I can. I actually just put in another part up there...
    ~~~~~
    Arecio visited two more times that month, I had a small sharp bit I'm using to scratch out the days, but she didn't say anything much that would halp me get out of here. I was let out of the cell and taken to a workyard out back one day, every prisoner gets that priveladge at least once a month, even me. And I met one of the meanest guys in history while I was out there.
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